an empty feeling in me resides...
a hollowness i feel inside...
some silent regrets cut me deep,
and all i have are those memories to keep...
a sprained neck from sitting up all night,
remembering you and all our silly fights...
my young heart was made of glass they grumble,
just one scratch was enough for it to crumble...
i wish we could relive it all again,
sans all the hurt all the pain...
maybe i would change a thing or two...
just maybe u'd realise how much i love you...
wish i could be there by ur side...
wish i could be there to ease the pain...
wish i could sleep in your arms...
wish we could hug in the rain...
all this love, i feel for you,
but i know ur just too far away...
and here i am, with tear stained eyes,
just trying to live by each coming day...
so many things have been left unsaid...
so many feelings lie unread...
but u told me u dint have anything to say,
the day i asked if i should stay away...
and ive just been waiting,from on then...
i know i shouldent, to hope would be wrong...
i pray u stay happy even it means u forget me,
because memories can be painful if stay for too long.
mine is an alleged average existence,
but without you, futile it all seems...
the chapter never closes, the book never ends,
as u continue to haunt me in my dreams!!
PROMPT: neck, average, scratch from 3ww
28 comments:
wow... :)
kiske liye hai... rolling eyes :)
Cheers!!!
u wrote this? Im in awe of ur writing skills Pri!
Keshi.
Wow!
perfect words... amazing emotions... every verse fits in jus right! awesome indeed!
2 good..Mind-blowing..Awesome...I am charting out my retirement plans from Blogpost now!!..This one takes the cake for the way it expresses many things-memories which become painful with time, existence which tends to seem futile...(cant state all..space constraints!).
PS: You are a potent dangerous combo of a doc along with being a great thinker! (Mite wana put the warning up: appraoch me with caution:-p)
have u written by yourself?..if so.....impressed by your skill guru..you r good poet also..give some tips to us...it will be great pleasure for me.
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so many things have been left unsaid...
so many feelings lie unread...
but u told me u dint have anything to say,
the day i asked u if i should stay away..."
very nicely said..
Wow.. the other side of the doc. Nice stuff girl.
waise u must be thinking wat an idiotic reply for an sad verse :)
but i cant believe tat some of this cud be true :)
for someone to forget u ... Pri, one must be lucky to have u... so he must be, whosoever he is :)
I dont think of it as fiction coz i see emotions there... but i m always guilty of jumpin d gun a lil early, and so wud i luv this time if u say that :)
Keep Smiling!!!
Cheers!!!
WOW.. Really superb...
From whr did u flicked this one?
Thats great writing Pri...
Flows perfectly - well done!
All said ... it still leaves that scar .. and so the haunting never stops.. for its the fate ..with which we stay all our life.. and am sure will feel good and smile after time passes :) good one !!
Tagged U :)
thats a sweet flow.... loved each and every single line...
so many things have been left unsaid...
so many feelings lie unread...
but u told me u dint have anything to say,
the day i asked u if i should stay away...
could relate to these lines well...
i loved every line of it, Pri.. i always wonder how such a pure strong feeling might become unanswered and all the attempts to get adjusted to life without someone you love are so futile.. you expressed the feelings very beautifully :)
@ cm-chap
pardon my lack of humour if that was a joke...but if that was ur idea of a compliment, then dontya think that people who find it difficult to compliment are better off not trying to?
dont get me wrong...critism is always welcome...
but i thought u knew me enough to know that everything on my blog is my work unless specified otherwise...
u might think im overreacting...but that word 'flicked' in ur comment really got me started...
beautiful.
I can so relate to it. sigh.
awesum man! i've been in tat state, n it hurts as hell to go through it..
ya've put them in ya poem so tremendously well tat i got my tear glands activated. almost :)
alleged average existence, the chap never closes,the book never ends- ya're right some peopel remain stuck in ya, n they live with ya n ya life all the way through..- ya must watch park avenue-it runs on these lines, n it's actor's madness/obsession with this kinda thought..
yeh kiske liye he doc?
one word- BEAUTIFUL!!!
This is sad. It's too bad we all hurt the people we love. Wouldn't it be nice if someone always loved you back... and no one was ever hurt? Oh my own version of Utopia :)
This is sad. It's too bad we all hurt the people we love. Wouldn't it be nice if someone always loved you back... and no one was ever hurt? Oh my own version of Utopia :)
this deserves more than applause...
mindblowing!!
maybe i would change a thing or two...
just maybe u'd realise how much i love you...
hmmmm
way to go doc:) nail on target..
beautiful! the person u wrote this for must have been one lucky and unlucky guy :)
lucky because he had you
unlucky because he lost you................or did he??
sweet. i like how lyrical this is.
That's a very nice verse, Priyanka! Sounds sooo much wistful, but probably it holds true for long lost friends too!
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